London Aspen

Thanks for replying guys! I took your advice and re-wrote it.-London

Bent, Last week I read a haiku that ANI wrote, and that inspired me to write many haikus. Was there a reason that there was no punctuation? -London

Thanks for looking at my poem. I was overjoyed when I came home from school and I had two replies! I really am nine, and in fourth grade. I have ...

It reads aloud well. I like the description in the second stanza. I was disappointed by the last stanza. I would have kept it more alive. -London

Thanks for looking at my story. I'm in fourth grade this year, but I've been writing for two years. -London

I like the voice of melancholy. Same as ANI the 9th and 10th lines are a bit too long, but flow together real well. Also, I enjoyed one syllable words ...

I'm actually nine... I'll need to fix that.

Bjorn, I liked the even meter,and the flow of the words. Very " Snow-flake-like." I really enjoyed the rhythm of it all. -London